Please review my website

**gocrazy** · 20-10-11

Hi,

I would like to receive some help from fellow affiliates who are also great web professionals and can give a proper advice. we have started our website more than half a year ago, but still it does not receive lots of traffic and 0 sales. we have even introduced the affiliate program, but that does not help either.

Can you please review our website go-crazy.co.uk and tell what may be wrong with it? Maybe it is not attractive and understandable to visitors and potential clients? What could be the reason of our failure? We want to find out the problems, clear them and start our business as we believe in our services (they have been tested for 5 years already in another EU country, so we are not newbies in party planning business)

If your verdict will be not so positive, maybe you could write PM first?

**warren_p** · 20-10-11

A search on Google shows that your title is 'UK hen and children party planners - GoCrazy' should be children's, at the moment it sounds like you plan parties for hens and their children. May be not the biggest issue, but worth changing as it is the first thing people will see when coming to your site.

I haven't had a proper look at the site yet, but will later.

**dc000000** · 20-10-11

Poor spelling/grammar and use of terms like 'bachelorette' are not doing you any favours. I'd have your copy cleaned up and maybe re-written before you do anything else?

**MattSweet** · 20-10-11

Originally Posted by dc000000

Poor spelling/grammar and use of terms like 'bachelorette' are not doing you any favours. I'd have your copy cleaned up and maybe re-written before you do anything else?

Yep it just reads like a load of scraped and (poorly) spun content which makes it look like spam straight away even if it isn't.

It appears you are translating it yourself and your English just isn't good enough (don't worry most of us on here struggle writing good copy in our first language....) so first thing is to get it written up properly.

Have a look at New copywriting service - free samples available and get in touch with someone who can sort your copy out. You will have to pay, but it isn't as expensive as you might think. It's also essential, as your current copy is not doing you any favours.

There will be other small issues that need sorting too, like the prices. In the UK the currency symbol comes before the price - £20 and not 20 £. Even seemingly minor things like this can detract from the authority of the site.

**gocrazy** · 20-10-11

Language issue is important, but are there any other issues to pay attention to?

**Deeps2365** · 23-10-11

It took me 15-25 seconds to work out your actually selling/offering. If I was a real visitor I would have clicked off within 2-3 seconds. There seems to be too much going on, on the page. Maybe make things simpler.

**m8internet** · 23-10-11

If I was planning a childrens party, I'd be worried about the two people on the main image on the right hand side! (gimp mask?)
Seriously though I agree with the above, apart from the phone number (which does even appear on the home page) it is difficult to work out where you are!
Initially I thought you were in Manchester then realised you offered parties in London and Oxford

However, when I went to Inquiry (another spelling error?) I was faced with a load of dates
This really should be Reservation / Order
The notes also have to be removed before entering text, I suggest changing this
The date has already been selected, so why is it required again as a note?
The same applies to the place, the drop down menu at the top selects this?
Leave the field empty, place the comments to the left under notes

**warren_p** · 25-10-11

Originally Posted by userseff

you need to use h1 , h2 , h3 these are important for search engine

They are using them

**gocrazy** · 25-10-11

Maybe there are more suggestions in SEO field?

**grezebang** · 31-10-11

Too much going on by the looks of things, you should try to keep it simple

**Sue_Neal** · 04-11-11

Hi there - I've had a look at your site - I think it's way too busy, too much going on, and not clear enough what you're actually offering. In a previous reply about this you acknowledge the language issue is important - I'd say it's absolutely critical!! Having a compelling headling, in particular, will make all the difference as to whether people stay on your site or click away. It really would pay you dividends if you'd get some advice on copywriting.

There's a great book called 'Tested Advertising Methods' by John Caples, which has some tried and tested advice about writing good advertising copy - a fascinating read, which shows how just changing a single word in a headline can affect sales in a really big way.

There's lots of free advice available on the web, too, about copywriting - it's really worth checking it out.

Good luck with your business!

**gocrazy** · 04-11-11

Well, the texts has been fixed by native English speaker. I think she made a great work. Also we have changed the header image in Spy Birthday page to more innocent and general one. Working on header of the home page.